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Dasken ignored Xander, emotions fully numbed. He pointed at random spots within the lake, making them boil momentarily. He sighed lightly. Just ignore the rest of the group. Have them leave you behind.
Dasken eyed the inside of the cabin, the feeling of warmth and joy seemingly flowing from it. Something held him back, however; he felt like he shouldn’t be allowed to enter.
Dasken could feel the joy and happiness dissolving against his negativity. He hung his head, not showing tears, and...
Dasken noticed that Xander was unable to open the door; it must be locked, Dasken thought. He launched himself with a massive explosion, landing a few yards from the house. He jogged up to the cabin, glancing at Ashley for a brief moment over his shoulder, and sighed. He held his hand on the...
Maybe have them slip in bits and pieces of their details of escape when they’re introduced and while they interact with the original Outcasts? That could help more than jumping to a totally different area with unused characters.
The way I’d set this up would be their escape arc as the prologue. That way, there can be a smoother transition and we won’t have to struggle to juggle two different scenarios at once and/or put anything from the first group on pause.
Like I said, I’m looking at it as a novel - some of the things in my head don’t make sense in practice. I also feel it’s just a bit too early to introduce the 2nd group...
I couldn’t tell you why. Just a gut feeling. Again, though, novel POV.
Introducing the second batch now (in the middle of the path to the mansion), though, would be a fairly awkward scenario, as there’s no previous context of there being another batch on the way.
I can see this one of three ways:
We cut to the other outcasts meeting up with the first group
The other outcasts find their way to the mansion after we get there
We wait awhile to introduce the other outcasts
@DeprivedSpartan
Honestly, I have no idea why you put a break inbetween the group leaving the cave and arriving at the cabin; there’s not much to do inbetween.
Dasken kept an eye on the group as he travelled semi-far off to the side. He found his attention floating between Darcel, Shawn, and especially Ashley. He occasionally released a flash of heat to keep the group nice and warm. He wanted to say so much, but held it in out of fear.
Dasken, blushing brighter than Ashley and shockedly silent, simply nodded lightly. “Y-y-y-yeah...” he stuttered, finally moving to remove his molten mess of shoes. “I...” he started, then stopped himself.
Why is she blushing..? Dasken thought, in denial of her possibly liking him back.
Although...
My family's song (and the song that's been our thing for as long as I can remember) was Bohemian Rhapsody. That has to be the only song I would ever come close to singing in public, since I know and love it so much.
There's only one, and sure; it may be generic (especially for this site), but the original Lance theme gives me so much nostalgia. I started playing Pokemon when I was only 9 years old, and that ended up being my childhood. :1
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