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Dark Shadows

*Gaspies* Shroomish-chan can has Fan Fic too?
I originally thought this up as a PRP, and I might post this on the PRP fourm, too. But, for now, I wanted to make it a story.


Serena looked around. She was standing in the middle of a field, in the dead of night. At least, it looked like night. The sky was pitch-black, with no sign of the stars or moon whatsoever. Suddenly, the sky began twisting, changing. Weird purple signs appeared in the air, swirling around nightmarishly. In a flash of dull red light, a figure appeared before her. Serena tried to scream and run away, but, she was stuck in her place. The creature lifted up its hand, using a power to lift Serena's face up to meet its. She stared into its one blue eye and...

Beep Beep, Beep Beep, Serena groaned and opened up her eyes. Morning already? She turned over and shut her alarm off. Sitting up, she tried to remember the details of her dream, but it was slipping away. Suddenly all she could remember was a flash of light and a blue eye. Serena shook her head and got up, walking to her closet, and sliding the doors open.

She pulled out a hangar covered in plastic and pulled something out. Her ranger school uniform. Putting it on, Serena examined herself in front of a mirror. Her light blonde hair was in two pigtails, reaching down to her ears. A green jacket covered a blue collared shirt, with matching-colored shorts. Fingerless gloves and brown boots finished the outfit. All that was left was her capture styler, which she would get at the school. "Serena! Breakfast's on the table!" An agitated Mrs. Jacobs yelled from downstairs. With a last glance in the mirror, Serena walked out her door.

At 12:00 noon the same day, Serena finally reached the ranger school. It was near Vien Town, and she lived in Puel Town. Knocking on the big, rusted iron gate, Serena waited... and waited... and waited.
10 minutes later, a troubled looking boy came up to the gate and unlocked it. He ran his fingers through his spiky light brown hair.

"Sorry 'bout that." He apologized, leading Serena in. "You're the first one. We weren't expecting anyone 'till 12:30."

"That's okay," Serena smiled, holding out her hand, "I like to be early. I'm Serena Jacobs."

The boy sighed in relief and shook Serena's his hand. "I'm Garrett Williams. Welcome to the Ranger school."



"Tours will start tomorrow, 9 O'clock sharp." The man called out. "If you're late, don't run in my hallways."

Garrett leaned over to Serena. "Expect that from Mr. Kincaid." He whispered. "He hates kids running in the halls. He's put posters up all around his classroom to remind his students."

Serena stiffled a giggle, and earned a stern look from Mr. Kincaid, or, as she'd heard used in her 4 hours at the school, Hairspray Head. Thinking of the teacher's nickname made her almost crack up again.

"Upstairs you will find your dorms. In the meantime, try to meet some new people. They'll be your friends for as long as you're in the ranger school, and maybe longer. And remember, no running in my hallways! Dismissed."


"Finally," Garret groaned. "I thought he'd never stop."

Serena nodded and headed for the stairs, almost tripping on a napping Bidoof in the progress. Apologizing profusely to the beaver pokemon, she hurried up the stairs.



I'm really sorry if this is too short. It was originally designed as a PRP, remember? I'll try to stick with this. Comments/ questions/ suggestions please?
 
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(This is becoming almost habit for me.)

It's nice, but as you said, a little short. I feel perhaps a little more description in certain areas, such as emotions at certain points and miscellaneous things, like accidently tripping up on a messy floor.

I don't know much about RP's, but from a writer's point of view it looks good and you should stay with it. If only so I can find out how far Vien and Puel are from each other.
 
Yes, it was a little short, ad hopefully you'll improve. One blue eye...And totally off-topic, but now every time I heard the word "Serena" I'm now seeing my RP charrie XD

Anyways, a Ranger is a cool idea now.
 
This could be epic. Is it going to be along the lines of the game, or something original? Either way, going with Starly would be epic!
 
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