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Whiteout (Pokemon Fanfic)

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Michelle8936

I've been posting stories for a while, and thought I'd try a new site, so for anyone who reads, enjoy.
Let me know if you want the first chapter, as said in the story, this is the prologue.
C+C please!
Note: this is a fanfic of the remakes of the GSC Gen. and the story starts off like the original plot in the games, but a few twists will be added soon enough. I don't own Pokemon and any of it's affilates...you know the drill.

Whiteout​
Prologue

As her crimson eyes darted up to a clock hung on her bedroom wall, a blue haired girl quickly took note of the time before returning her attention to the object she held in her hands, ok, seven o
 
Carmen Lopez

Carmen Lopez

This sounds interesting and I'd like to see where this goes. Pokemon Crystal was an awesome game it'll be cool to see a fic based on it.
So yes I definitely want chapter 1 :)
 
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Michelle8936

Yay! Reviews! Here's the first chapter.

Chapter One - What to do?

As crimson eyes slowly opened, a sudden rush of recent memories tore through her head. She leapt up from a white dressed bed, and shot a look out the window. She was apparently in a small town, with a large forest that bordered the horizon in all directions. From her vantage point, she also noticed there was an exit in the eastern section of the town that led into a large field of green, tall grass. Beyond that, there was forest, and even further than that, she could just barely make out the skyscrapers and tall apartment buildings that must
 
DoggyEars

DoggyEars

I remember writing a Crystal story back when I first got the game. I love how you made the person go inside the game! In mine it was the same storyline with a bunch of comments (quite often rude) from the main character. But, anyways, keep up the good work!
 
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Michelle8936

Alright! Thanks for the review, and here's the next chapter!

Chapter Two - Travel to Cherrygrove

"Boy," Serena said, starting to tire, "Route 29 is a helluvalot easier to walk in the game..." Rusty trotted alongside the blue haired girl as she continued on her way. Checking her Pokegear, Serena noted that they were still a good several miles from Cherrygrove. Stopping in her tracks, she sat down, leaning against a tree. "Ok, that's enough walking for now." she muttered.
As the little fox Pokemon sat on his haunches next to her, Serena took a small bowl out of her backpack as well as a bag of Pokemon food, and a couple rice balls for herself. Opening the bag, she poured the food into the bowl, then placed it on the ground in front of the Eevee, who then rightfully stuffed his face clear into the bowl, catching any food that fell out.
Serena hid a chuckle as she watched her Pokemon eat, then unwrapped one of the rice balls and proceeded to eat her neglected dinner. She frowned as thoughts previously uncontemplated entered her mind. I wonder how I'm supposed to get home...but...more importantly, why am I here? Everything happens for a reason.
She sighed. Several minutes seemed to have passed, and having been occupied with those thoughts had deprived her of her appetite. Wrapping the half eaten rice ball in Saranwrap, she also put Rusty's food bowl back in her bag. Standing up, she put the bag on her shoulders, and continued to walk towards her destination.
Suddenly remembering, she reached down as she was walking and unclipped the two pokeballs from her belt. I wonder which is Rusty's, she thought as her eyes flashed between the two. There were no discerning marks on either pokeball, so Serena came to the conclusion that Rusty had never actually been 'caught'.
Kneeling down in front of the Pokemon, she touched his black nose to the button on one of the pokeballs, and it opened, drawing the Eevee in. She then stood up, and threw the used pokeball into the air. It flew open, and in a flash of white light, the Eevee was in front of her again, giving her a quizzical look.
"Well, that's good," she said, "now there won't be any mistakes if we run into a trainer."
The twosome continued walking, and shortly Serena caught sight of a group of skyscrapers above the trees.
 
leehage

leehage

Hmm, good concept, varied battles, slight humor. I like it. Keep up the good work and as for constructive criticism, I haven't got any. Everything looks great!
 
Carmen Lopez

Carmen Lopez

This is really bringing back the Crystal memories. I really like how you brought the game to life and now I want that G/S/C remake more than ever!
 
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Michelle8936

Yeah, two reviews now, so here's the next chapter! Sorry it's a little late, I actually completely forgot about it. ^^;


Chapter Three - New Friends and a Rival

Biking back along the path they
 
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