Cinder's story...Secrets of the Relic

[Cinder]

Yeah, I know...I'm fairly new here...but I've been writing a story on another site, and it's gotten good reviews so far...I'll tranfer it over chapter by chapter, but for now, here's the link to the entire story insofar:
http://z11.invisionfree.com/Universal/index.php?showtopic=457

And...here's the first chapter...sorry for the smilies...they tend to get messed up when I copy this over...

Chapter 1: The Crew

Scene 1
Two strangers have walked into a bar in Rogueport...they approach the bar and sit down...the bartender, Podley, turns to talk to them

Podley: So, ya gonna order, or are ya just gonna waste my time...
Stranger #1: Just hangin' out...that a problem?
Podley: *sigh*...look here, ya punks...I don't want people in here wasting my--HEY!! Break it up, you two!!
(The strangers turn to see two drunken sailors in a fistfight...the first stranger gets up, and uses bloodbending to hold them to the ground...)
Stranger #1: Now where were we?
Podley (in awe): Holy ****! I-I-I didn't recognize you...my apologizes, CN...hehe...you're more than welcome to stay...
Stranger #1 (CN): ^_^...why, thank you...(whispers to Stranger #2) tch...took him long enough...
Sranger #2 (Ralph): @_@...hold on...CN..we're gonna need a crew...
CN: Huh?
Ralph: CN, you're the captain of the Flying Dutchman...do you really think we can go without a crew? The two of us can't handle it...
CN: True...but do you really think we'll find anyone here?
(Enter Geno)
Geno (to Podley): a glass of vodka, Pods...
Podley: Comin' up, Geno...and please, don't EVER call me that again...
Geno: ^_^...*turns to side* CN?!
CN: *looks toward Geno* Geno?! Man, how've ya been...
Geno: It's been hell to be honest...ever since we took the Ancient Minister out, I've been bored as hell...I'm living in the Underground now...
CN: The Underground? Geez...tough place...
Geno: It's not that bad anymore...I saw your ship...looks like it could use a crew...I got ya covered *Turns to Podley* Forget the vodka, Pods, I'm headin' home...
Podley:

 

[Cinder]

Sorry, it's been a while...I came to the realization that chapters 2-5 are mere fillers, so I've decided not to post them...but here's six...and it's the last one I'm posting...if you want the rest, follow that link...

Chapter 6: Geno's Grudge

Scene 1
CN and Geno are heading to the registration booth...Ralph stays at the hotel, to watch the match on the big screen set up

Ralph: Good luck, guys...I'll be watchin' ya...
CN: *puts on sunglasses* Well, yeah...we'd better get a move on, Geno...don't wanna be late...
Geno: Right...
(CN and Geno have arrived at the arena, which is the old Poshley Sanctum...they have finished registering, and are listening to the MC give the rules)
MC: Hey ho, fighters! I'm MC Ballyhoo, and I'll be yer host and announcer for this event...let's go over the rules, shall we?
CN: *rolls eyes agitatedly*...
MC: First off, you guys will have no access to watch other matches...this prevents strategy exposure...second, the winner of each round is determined when one side raises their white flag, or is knocked unconscious...other than that, anything goes, so off ya go!!
CN: Let's just get this pwnfest over with...

Scene 2
CN has risen to the semifinals...he is now up against the grandson of a legendary Glitzville fighter

MC: In the blue corner, we have a legendary-spirited young man...weighing in at 170 pounds, this firecraker has risen through to the semifinals without breaking a sweat...here he is...the Avatar himself...CN!!
(CN strides into the arena, as the onlookers cheer him on...)
MC: And in the red corner, the descendant of one of Glitzville's greatest fighters...weighing in at 250 pounds, the legend himself...give it up for Rawk Hawk III!!
(Rawk Hawk III strides into the arena)
MC: Now that the contestants are ready, let's battle!!
()CN starts the match by launching a fireball...Rawk dodges it, and dashes at CN...CN stomps the ground, causing an earth pillar to jut out...after knocking Rawk back, CN leaps at the pillar, knocking it over...he then surfs along the floor, heading straight for Rawk...)
Rawk: Pah, too easy...get ready to be RAAAAWWWWWWKKKKED!!!
(Rawk stomps the ground, causing a wall of rock to rise up...CN, shocked that Rawk is an Earthbender, loses his balance...)
Rawk: Heh...didn't see that comin', didja?
CN: