It's possible that a lot of people here have forgotten who I am, so re-intro. I'm Kera, Lycan, writer, spriter, fabulous. Recently, I've been writing a book, and my total number of proofreads is, well, one.
So, I decided to branch out to a wider audience, and you guys were the pick of the number.
WARNING: This is a very long book. A novel. I'm going to post the first six chapters in three posts (very long posts) and I'd like a little feedback.
This is going to be rather confusing, I can tell. Everything will be explained as the story and plot unfolds. Just bear with me 'till then.
Without further adieu...
Tick. Tick. Tick. Tick.
The sound of ticking had rung in the man’s mind since he entered the manor in the sky. How he had gotten there, he didn’t know. All he knew was that he was here to make right what he did. He stopped at a set of doubled doors, painted deep blue and detailed in pink. He gingerly grabbed the brass handle on the right door and turned it tentatively.
A strong blast of cold air whipped the man’s hair, making him close his eyes from the sheer force of the wind. He opened them again and stuck his head into the room. It was a large sprawling room, but very under decorated. A bed in the far right corner, covered in blue sheets, a wardrobe on the parallel wall. A small desk at the back, lamps placed at random spaces in the room.
Perhaps the most befuddling was the glass spheres floating above the room; there must have been hundreds, all filled with different colored smoke. Wispy clouds of greens, blues, yellows, reds, and every color in-between.
The man stepped carefully into the room. His face was reflected on the white marble floor; his face was perspiring at an alarming rate, his eyes filled with an odd mixture of wonder, fear, and confusion. The far wall of great stained glass windows cast multicolored light into the great room, making it seem like the end of a rainbow, minus the pot of gold.
“Excuse Klockwork,” said a deep voice behind the man. He whirled in fright, ready to fight the voice. There was a tall, pale man with dark brown hair dressed in a blue coat and pink scarf. In his hand he held a crystalline cane.
“Excuse Klockwork,” the second man said again. “But what is this Terrie doing in Klockwork’s room?” He seemed to be talking to someone unseen, but was staring intently at the first man. “Y-You mean me?” he asked, and the man in blue-and-pink nodded.
“I-I don’t know how I got h-here,” he stammered. “But I’m sorry if this is your room, I’ll leave-”
The man in blue held up a hand. “No more. Klockwork knows why this Terrie is here.” The man shoved past the confused gentleman, who looked at him oddly. “Who are you?”
“Klockwork,” the blue man replied. “The name of the person the Terrie is talking to is named Klockwork.” He stood in the center of the vast room and held is hand above him, as if feeling for drops of rain.
Instead of rain, a long staff-like object appeared in his hand.
The first man was bewildered, as this was nothing like anything he had ever seen. The staff was taller than the man called ‘Klockwork,’ and topped with what seemed to be with an elaborate face-clock. That wasn’t all; the clock seemed to be on fire.
“Klockwork would like to know what happened to make this Terrie come to Klockwork,” Klockwork said, staring at the now trembling man. He shook his head in indication that he had no idea what he was talking about.
“Let Klockwork put it this way,” he began and held his staff upright, then let go. Instead of toppling over, the staff remain motionless; even the flames ceased their dancing. “Has something terrible happened to the Terrie, causing the Terrie unimaginable grief, guilt, or depression?”
The man began to shake his head, but stopped mid-shake. “Y-yes,” he started. “My wife died the other day, died in a house fire. I’ve lost interest in everything, and I’m considering committing suicide… My kids are the only reason I’m still alive.” He stopped, wondering whether it was really a good idea to tell all this to Klockwork.
Klockwork smiled. “Klockwork will help. Klockwork will reverse time and help the Terrie get the Terrie’s wife back.” The man was struck with doubt. “That’s impossible,” he said immediately, turning his nose up at Klockwork.
But Klockwork merely grabbed his staff and began fiddling with the clock face. “What time did the Terrie’s wife die?”
The man replied it was two days prior. Klockwork adjusted the clock, and then slammed the staff on the ground. All movement seemed to stop; even the air felt still. Outside the stained glass windows, the sun began a eastward arc, as if time itself were reversing.
The moon rose from the east, set, and the sun rose again. The sun set once more and the cycle happened twice more. Then the sun stopped in the same spot it had been before it began moving backwards. It was as if nothing had changed.
“The day is now three days before the Terrie’s wife died,” Klockwork announced. The man stood stunned, not believing his incredible luck. He could save his wife from that fire! Klockwork seemed to sense his joy and chuckled.
“There is a price for Klockwork’s services.” The man raised a brow quizzically. “What kind of price?” he inquired.
“A secret,” Klockwork spoke. “A deep, personal secret from the Terrie. That is what Klockwork desires.”
The man’s face went pale, forgetting that with every gift there was a price. He took a step back, hoping to make a run for it, but he was frozen in place. He could hardly breathe.
“The Terrie cannot escape,” Klockwork said. “Klockwork demands Klockwork’s pay. If the Terrie does not pay, Klockwork will be forced to reverse the time reversal.”
The man considered this. He desperately wanted his wife back. He finally tried to nod, but couldn’t, as he was frozen under Klockwork’s spell. Sensing his agreeance, Klockwork unfroze him. He snapped his fingers, and a clear, empty sphere descended from the tinkling mass of ones above him.
“The Terrie must speak secret into the orb, and the Terrie may go home.” Klockwork gestured to the sphere, with its curious emptiness and restlessness to be filled. The man took the orb into his hands and hesitantly put his lips to the orb. He spoke slowly and surely into the orb, gray smoke filtering into the orb form his mouth.
The orb was filled with wispy smoke. A cork stopper suddenly appeared in the top, preventing the smoke from escaping. The man smiled, holding the orb out to Klockwork, who took it and meticulously scrutinized the inside.
Suddenly, Klockwork let go of the sphere altogether. The orb crashed onto the marble floor with a deafening shatter. The smoke that had been contained within turned a menacing shade of black. Klockwork regarded the dissipating with low interest. “Oops,” he said casually.
“Oh gosh, sorry, I can-” the man started, but Klockwork held up a hand, his head bowed to the floor. He then looked up, metaphorical flames dancing in his deep fuchsia eyes.
“The Terrie lied to Klockwork,” he snarled. “The Terrie’s secret was not true. Klockwork does not accept lies.” He slammed his staff down powerfully, and the sun froze again, this time heading west, fast-forwarding the few days that Klockwork had reversed.
The man fell to his knees, stricken. “No! I’m sorry, please, give me another chance, I won’t lie this time!” he cried, but in vain.
Klockwork regarded him like a mere parasite. “Leave,” he boomed. “And do not come to Klockwork again. The Terries’ filthy taint has poisoned his chances of ever seeing the Terrie’s wife again.”
Klockwork pointed his staff at the man, the flames spiraling towards him in a vortex of fire and deafening crackling, consuming him, burning him, damning him where he knelt.
The man woke at his office desk, scalding coffee pouring on his face and clothes. He sat up and shook his head, hoping his dream had only been just that.
Klockwork stared at the glass shards on the marble floor of his room.
He sighed and began to gather them up, slicing his finger in the process. He swore, dropping the shards, watching the thin red line of crimson across his forefinger grow to a trail. He wiped the blood on his fuchsia scarf and gathered the shards once more, except more carefully.
“Aw, did Klockie hurt himself again?” said a high pitched voice from above. Klockwork looked up and scowled; he saw nothing and returned to his work. A slight jangle of his spheres rousted him again, and he saw what looked like a broom descending from his cloud of spheres.
Klockwork growled. “Lucinda, come out. If Lucinda wants something, then Lucinda should tell Klockwork now,” he said, continuing again with the glass.
“You’re such a stinge,” the voice said again, and the spheres clattered noisily. Klockwork looked up once again to see a young teenage girl in a shin-length black dress and platinum blonde hair in a bob cut balancing on a wooden broomstick, just beneath Klockwork’s spheres. The girl pawed a sphere aside, and regarded Klockwork suspiciously.
“I’ve always wondered about your fascination with these little baubles,” she said, holding one filled with bright blue smoke. Klockwork glared at her. “Klockwork’s ‘baubles’ are Klockwork’s business, Lucinda.”
Lucinda let go of the orb, which floated up with the others. “Whatever. Say, what day is it?”
“Thursday,” Klockwork said, busying himself with the glass again. Lucinda huffed. “I could have sworn it was Monday twenty minutes ago.”
Klockwork paused, but for a fraction of a second, but that hesitation was all Lucinda needed. “What did you do?” she asked softly. Her soft voice always indicated her prying nature.
“Nothing,” Klockwork replied, carrying the glass shards to a small can in the corner of the room, dumping them. When he turned around again, Lucinda was standing where he had been a moment before, her broom suspended in the air next to her.
“You messed with time again, didn’t you?” When Klockwork said nothing, she said, “You did, didn’t you! Why?”
“Klockwork doesn’t have to tell Lucinda,” he said snidely, stalking across the room to his desk. Lucinda followed, her broom trailing behind. “Klockwork, tell me. Now.”
“What would Lucinda do if Klockwork didn’t tell?” he countered venomously. Lucinda paused. Klockwork looked smug for a moment, and then Lucinda spoke.
“I’ll tell Day and Night that you’ve been messing with their, well, days and nights.” Klockwork’s eyes widened a fraction of an inch, Lucinda had hit the nail. “Or, I’ll tell Mum and Dad.”
Klockwork narrowed his eyes and grimaced. “Lucinda wouldn’t.”
"Lucinda would,” she replied. They stared each other down for a few moments, Lucinda’s gaze cool and smug, Klockwork’s glare venomous enough to make a tree shrivel to ash.
Klockwork broke the gaze, gritting his teeth. Lucinda uttered a triumphant “Ha!” as she leapt atop Klockwork’s desk. “Tell me,” she said, wrinkling her nose in a smug, victorious smile.
For a moment, Klockwork was silent. Then, he looked into Lucinda’s eyes and spoke to her, “Klockwork’s baubles are really secrets.”
Lucinda’s smile faded. She stared at him uncomprehendingly. “Excuse me? Did you just say what I think you just said?”
Klockwork nodded. “Klockwork takes secrets from Terries. Klockwork reverses time so the Terries can fix something that the Terrie has messed up. And Klockwork takes secrets as pay.”
Lucinda slid off of his desk. “You’re mad,” she said. “Corrupt.” Klockwork hung his head. “That’s so awesome!” Klockwork looked up in confusion.
Lucinda was smiling broadly. “I don’t know why I never thought of that!” She sank into thought. “Then again, there’s not much you can do with space…”
Klockwork snapped his fingers, breaking Lucinda out of her trance. “Is Lucinda going to tell Mother and Father now?” Lucinda shook her head. Klockwork relaxed. “Good.” Lucinda strode over to Klockwork’s bed and flopped down upon it. “Your bed is really soft, bro,” she said.
Klockwork suddenly looked up. “Why is Lucinda in Klockwork’s room?” Lucinda sat up. “I don’t remember,” she said, putting a finger on her chin and wrinkling her nose; her thinking pose.
“Aha!” she yelped, leaping off the bed. Klockwork, startled, etched a long, jagged line of ink on the paper he’d been writing on. He glared at Lucinda, who was touching her finger to her nose.
“I was supposed to tell you the Council starts in… Er,” Lucinda checked her watch. She deciphered the numbers on the watch and shouted “Ten minutes!”
Klockwork sighed. “Thanks, Lucinda. Now leave.” Lucinda wiggled her fingers at him in a wave, whistled, and jumped as her broomstick came beneath her. She came down, balanced precariously on the stick, and zoomed up to the ceiling, and through Klockwork’s cloud of secrets.
Klockwork shook his head at his sister’s strangeness. He stood, taking his crystalline cane in one hand, and his time staff in one hand. He slammed the end of the staff onto the marbled floor, and the clock atop the staff burst into flames.
The flames descended upon Klockwork, who seemed unharmed, or unfazed, by the flames’ heat. The flames swirled around him in a red-orange vortex, whipping his clothes to and fro.
In less than a minute, he had disappeared from the spot, not a single charred stain upon the marble floor where had stood.
(To clarify, no, Klockwork does not speak in third person. He just does not use pronouns. Just putting that out there.)
So, I decided to branch out to a wider audience, and you guys were the pick of the number.
WARNING: This is a very long book. A novel. I'm going to post the first six chapters in three posts (very long posts) and I'd like a little feedback.
This is going to be rather confusing, I can tell. Everything will be explained as the story and plot unfolds. Just bear with me 'till then.
Without further adieu...
The Lazulian Diaries- Deceit
Prologue: Conscience of Glass
Prologue: Conscience of Glass
Tick. Tick. Tick. Tick.
The sound of ticking had rung in the man’s mind since he entered the manor in the sky. How he had gotten there, he didn’t know. All he knew was that he was here to make right what he did. He stopped at a set of doubled doors, painted deep blue and detailed in pink. He gingerly grabbed the brass handle on the right door and turned it tentatively.
A strong blast of cold air whipped the man’s hair, making him close his eyes from the sheer force of the wind. He opened them again and stuck his head into the room. It was a large sprawling room, but very under decorated. A bed in the far right corner, covered in blue sheets, a wardrobe on the parallel wall. A small desk at the back, lamps placed at random spaces in the room.
Perhaps the most befuddling was the glass spheres floating above the room; there must have been hundreds, all filled with different colored smoke. Wispy clouds of greens, blues, yellows, reds, and every color in-between.
The man stepped carefully into the room. His face was reflected on the white marble floor; his face was perspiring at an alarming rate, his eyes filled with an odd mixture of wonder, fear, and confusion. The far wall of great stained glass windows cast multicolored light into the great room, making it seem like the end of a rainbow, minus the pot of gold.
“Excuse Klockwork,” said a deep voice behind the man. He whirled in fright, ready to fight the voice. There was a tall, pale man with dark brown hair dressed in a blue coat and pink scarf. In his hand he held a crystalline cane.
“Excuse Klockwork,” the second man said again. “But what is this Terrie doing in Klockwork’s room?” He seemed to be talking to someone unseen, but was staring intently at the first man. “Y-You mean me?” he asked, and the man in blue-and-pink nodded.
“I-I don’t know how I got h-here,” he stammered. “But I’m sorry if this is your room, I’ll leave-”
The man in blue held up a hand. “No more. Klockwork knows why this Terrie is here.” The man shoved past the confused gentleman, who looked at him oddly. “Who are you?”
“Klockwork,” the blue man replied. “The name of the person the Terrie is talking to is named Klockwork.” He stood in the center of the vast room and held is hand above him, as if feeling for drops of rain.
Instead of rain, a long staff-like object appeared in his hand.
The first man was bewildered, as this was nothing like anything he had ever seen. The staff was taller than the man called ‘Klockwork,’ and topped with what seemed to be with an elaborate face-clock. That wasn’t all; the clock seemed to be on fire.
“Klockwork would like to know what happened to make this Terrie come to Klockwork,” Klockwork said, staring at the now trembling man. He shook his head in indication that he had no idea what he was talking about.
“Let Klockwork put it this way,” he began and held his staff upright, then let go. Instead of toppling over, the staff remain motionless; even the flames ceased their dancing. “Has something terrible happened to the Terrie, causing the Terrie unimaginable grief, guilt, or depression?”
The man began to shake his head, but stopped mid-shake. “Y-yes,” he started. “My wife died the other day, died in a house fire. I’ve lost interest in everything, and I’m considering committing suicide… My kids are the only reason I’m still alive.” He stopped, wondering whether it was really a good idea to tell all this to Klockwork.
Klockwork smiled. “Klockwork will help. Klockwork will reverse time and help the Terrie get the Terrie’s wife back.” The man was struck with doubt. “That’s impossible,” he said immediately, turning his nose up at Klockwork.
But Klockwork merely grabbed his staff and began fiddling with the clock face. “What time did the Terrie’s wife die?”
The man replied it was two days prior. Klockwork adjusted the clock, and then slammed the staff on the ground. All movement seemed to stop; even the air felt still. Outside the stained glass windows, the sun began a eastward arc, as if time itself were reversing.
The moon rose from the east, set, and the sun rose again. The sun set once more and the cycle happened twice more. Then the sun stopped in the same spot it had been before it began moving backwards. It was as if nothing had changed.
“The day is now three days before the Terrie’s wife died,” Klockwork announced. The man stood stunned, not believing his incredible luck. He could save his wife from that fire! Klockwork seemed to sense his joy and chuckled.
“There is a price for Klockwork’s services.” The man raised a brow quizzically. “What kind of price?” he inquired.
“A secret,” Klockwork spoke. “A deep, personal secret from the Terrie. That is what Klockwork desires.”
The man’s face went pale, forgetting that with every gift there was a price. He took a step back, hoping to make a run for it, but he was frozen in place. He could hardly breathe.
“The Terrie cannot escape,” Klockwork said. “Klockwork demands Klockwork’s pay. If the Terrie does not pay, Klockwork will be forced to reverse the time reversal.”
The man considered this. He desperately wanted his wife back. He finally tried to nod, but couldn’t, as he was frozen under Klockwork’s spell. Sensing his agreeance, Klockwork unfroze him. He snapped his fingers, and a clear, empty sphere descended from the tinkling mass of ones above him.
“The Terrie must speak secret into the orb, and the Terrie may go home.” Klockwork gestured to the sphere, with its curious emptiness and restlessness to be filled. The man took the orb into his hands and hesitantly put his lips to the orb. He spoke slowly and surely into the orb, gray smoke filtering into the orb form his mouth.
The orb was filled with wispy smoke. A cork stopper suddenly appeared in the top, preventing the smoke from escaping. The man smiled, holding the orb out to Klockwork, who took it and meticulously scrutinized the inside.
Suddenly, Klockwork let go of the sphere altogether. The orb crashed onto the marble floor with a deafening shatter. The smoke that had been contained within turned a menacing shade of black. Klockwork regarded the dissipating with low interest. “Oops,” he said casually.
“Oh gosh, sorry, I can-” the man started, but Klockwork held up a hand, his head bowed to the floor. He then looked up, metaphorical flames dancing in his deep fuchsia eyes.
“The Terrie lied to Klockwork,” he snarled. “The Terrie’s secret was not true. Klockwork does not accept lies.” He slammed his staff down powerfully, and the sun froze again, this time heading west, fast-forwarding the few days that Klockwork had reversed.
The man fell to his knees, stricken. “No! I’m sorry, please, give me another chance, I won’t lie this time!” he cried, but in vain.
Klockwork regarded him like a mere parasite. “Leave,” he boomed. “And do not come to Klockwork again. The Terries’ filthy taint has poisoned his chances of ever seeing the Terrie’s wife again.”
Klockwork pointed his staff at the man, the flames spiraling towards him in a vortex of fire and deafening crackling, consuming him, burning him, damning him where he knelt.
The man woke at his office desk, scalding coffee pouring on his face and clothes. He sat up and shook his head, hoping his dream had only been just that.
Chapter I: A Secret Shared
Klockwork stared at the glass shards on the marble floor of his room.
He sighed and began to gather them up, slicing his finger in the process. He swore, dropping the shards, watching the thin red line of crimson across his forefinger grow to a trail. He wiped the blood on his fuchsia scarf and gathered the shards once more, except more carefully.
“Aw, did Klockie hurt himself again?” said a high pitched voice from above. Klockwork looked up and scowled; he saw nothing and returned to his work. A slight jangle of his spheres rousted him again, and he saw what looked like a broom descending from his cloud of spheres.
Klockwork growled. “Lucinda, come out. If Lucinda wants something, then Lucinda should tell Klockwork now,” he said, continuing again with the glass.
“You’re such a stinge,” the voice said again, and the spheres clattered noisily. Klockwork looked up once again to see a young teenage girl in a shin-length black dress and platinum blonde hair in a bob cut balancing on a wooden broomstick, just beneath Klockwork’s spheres. The girl pawed a sphere aside, and regarded Klockwork suspiciously.
“I’ve always wondered about your fascination with these little baubles,” she said, holding one filled with bright blue smoke. Klockwork glared at her. “Klockwork’s ‘baubles’ are Klockwork’s business, Lucinda.”
Lucinda let go of the orb, which floated up with the others. “Whatever. Say, what day is it?”
“Thursday,” Klockwork said, busying himself with the glass again. Lucinda huffed. “I could have sworn it was Monday twenty minutes ago.”
Klockwork paused, but for a fraction of a second, but that hesitation was all Lucinda needed. “What did you do?” she asked softly. Her soft voice always indicated her prying nature.
“Nothing,” Klockwork replied, carrying the glass shards to a small can in the corner of the room, dumping them. When he turned around again, Lucinda was standing where he had been a moment before, her broom suspended in the air next to her.
“You messed with time again, didn’t you?” When Klockwork said nothing, she said, “You did, didn’t you! Why?”
“Klockwork doesn’t have to tell Lucinda,” he said snidely, stalking across the room to his desk. Lucinda followed, her broom trailing behind. “Klockwork, tell me. Now.”
“What would Lucinda do if Klockwork didn’t tell?” he countered venomously. Lucinda paused. Klockwork looked smug for a moment, and then Lucinda spoke.
“I’ll tell Day and Night that you’ve been messing with their, well, days and nights.” Klockwork’s eyes widened a fraction of an inch, Lucinda had hit the nail. “Or, I’ll tell Mum and Dad.”
Klockwork narrowed his eyes and grimaced. “Lucinda wouldn’t.”
"Lucinda would,” she replied. They stared each other down for a few moments, Lucinda’s gaze cool and smug, Klockwork’s glare venomous enough to make a tree shrivel to ash.
Klockwork broke the gaze, gritting his teeth. Lucinda uttered a triumphant “Ha!” as she leapt atop Klockwork’s desk. “Tell me,” she said, wrinkling her nose in a smug, victorious smile.
For a moment, Klockwork was silent. Then, he looked into Lucinda’s eyes and spoke to her, “Klockwork’s baubles are really secrets.”
Lucinda’s smile faded. She stared at him uncomprehendingly. “Excuse me? Did you just say what I think you just said?”
Klockwork nodded. “Klockwork takes secrets from Terries. Klockwork reverses time so the Terries can fix something that the Terrie has messed up. And Klockwork takes secrets as pay.”
Lucinda slid off of his desk. “You’re mad,” she said. “Corrupt.” Klockwork hung his head. “That’s so awesome!” Klockwork looked up in confusion.
Lucinda was smiling broadly. “I don’t know why I never thought of that!” She sank into thought. “Then again, there’s not much you can do with space…”
Klockwork snapped his fingers, breaking Lucinda out of her trance. “Is Lucinda going to tell Mother and Father now?” Lucinda shook her head. Klockwork relaxed. “Good.” Lucinda strode over to Klockwork’s bed and flopped down upon it. “Your bed is really soft, bro,” she said.
Klockwork suddenly looked up. “Why is Lucinda in Klockwork’s room?” Lucinda sat up. “I don’t remember,” she said, putting a finger on her chin and wrinkling her nose; her thinking pose.
“Aha!” she yelped, leaping off the bed. Klockwork, startled, etched a long, jagged line of ink on the paper he’d been writing on. He glared at Lucinda, who was touching her finger to her nose.
“I was supposed to tell you the Council starts in… Er,” Lucinda checked her watch. She deciphered the numbers on the watch and shouted “Ten minutes!”
Klockwork sighed. “Thanks, Lucinda. Now leave.” Lucinda wiggled her fingers at him in a wave, whistled, and jumped as her broomstick came beneath her. She came down, balanced precariously on the stick, and zoomed up to the ceiling, and through Klockwork’s cloud of secrets.
Klockwork shook his head at his sister’s strangeness. He stood, taking his crystalline cane in one hand, and his time staff in one hand. He slammed the end of the staff onto the marbled floor, and the clock atop the staff burst into flames.
The flames descended upon Klockwork, who seemed unharmed, or unfazed, by the flames’ heat. The flames swirled around him in a red-orange vortex, whipping his clothes to and fro.
In less than a minute, he had disappeared from the spot, not a single charred stain upon the marble floor where had stood.
(To clarify, no, Klockwork does not speak in third person. He just does not use pronouns. Just putting that out there.)