Well, nya, the art was good...but cuz it's got Generation 4 Pokemon...I can't read it now! T_T But it was sooo good, and what I saw of Sheimi was ADORABLE! The girl was done really well, too, and the pencil shading was nice. It made it a lot easier to see with everything shaded...and looked sooooooo spiffy.
But ya. Grammar/spelling/text...maybe just read through the script or something. But the art is so good, it's kinda hard to notice the shortcomings with the grammar. ^_^;;
O yeah and persians drawings are amazing to.
Yay for Sheimi! I love the little thing, but I will never stop thinking of it as the Chia-pet Pokemon ^^
One qualm with this, though, is your spelling and grammar. You're missing some caps, and spelled "exists" wrong. Also said "it's never been seen with human eyes" when it should've just been "its". And "looks like your tired" instead of "you're".
"It's" is short for "it is" or "it has"...