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Private/Closed Naruto AU RP: discussion

First Exam:

  • Written exam

    Votes: 5 41.7%

  • ??? New exam

    Votes: 7 58.3%
  • Total voters
    12
  • Poll closed .
SageNeb

SageNeb

Previously 5DigitNeb
Name: Sema Hakiro
Gender: Female
Age: 15
Village: Sunagakure
Jutsu type: Wind Release; Genjutsu; Poison-Specialist; Custom Dojutsu: Hawkeye
Description: Long orange hair; Short; Black Sandals; Purple tee with mesh sleeves; Hazel eyes; Purple shorts
Bio: Sema doesn't use normal ninjutsu, but is instead an archer. She carries around three scrolls which release a crossbow for long range, a normal bow for regular range, and a shortbow for close range. She also uses senbon instead of kunai, or when up against a taijutsu specialist. Sema knows a great deal of poison and taints her arrows and senbon with different poison that inflicts certain effects. She uses her wind style to enhance her speed and to cover her arrows. These enhanced arrows are so sharp due to the wind style that they can pierce through wind storms like dust storms which are usually around Suna.

Sema also has exceptional chakra control which allows her to not use any more chakra then necessary. This caused her to be able to use genjutsu to an amazing degree with vibrations caused by strumming her bows. Her parents are from her father's side, a Hyuga and from her mother's a member of the Yome clan with the Suitekigan. The two caused a new dojutsu which Sema dubbed "Hawkeye" with the ability to have nothing obstruct her vision such as dust and smokescreens. They can zoom in to things in her field of vision and although she can't tell the chakra system of whoever she is looking at like the Byakugan, she can see the inside the skeleton, Nervous system, and Circulatory system if she focuses hard enough. Though then she can only focus on one person and not her surroundings. The Hawkeye ability also causes faster reactions, though not to the extent of the Sharingan where they can predict the opponent's next movements.

She can see farther in a certain direction, though to a lesser degree than the Byakugan. She can also see farther all around her, though once again not to the extent of the Byakugan. This can be improved through training, however. Sema is also very nimble due to her small stature and overall body being smaller than normal.
Likes: Tea, Focusing, Archery
Dislikes: Fighting between her allies, Loudness, Arrogant people.
Missions completed: 30 D-Rank, 17 C-Rank, 3 B-Rank
 
kyuukestu

kyuukestu

Hmmm, an interesting dojutsu. Though...it's basically just an inferior Byakugan since it lacks any of the traits of Yome's ability.

It's simply the Byakugan's X-ray vision with inferior zoom, inferior chakra perception, and inferior reaction speed.
 
Godjacob

Godjacob

5DigitNeb said:
The two caused a new dojutsu which Sema dubbed "Hawkeye" with the ability to have nothing obstruct her vision such as dust and smokescreens. They can zoom in to things in her field of vision and although she can't tell the chakra system of whoever she is looking at like the Byakugan, she can see the inside the skeleton, Nervous system, and Circulatory system if she focuses hard enough. Though then she can only focus on one person and not her surroundings. The Hawkeye ability also causes faster reactions, though not to the extent of the Sharingan where they can predict the opponent's next movements.
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The ability is interesting, but it may be "too weak" with the Byakugan under Kyuu's command and the Sharingan to stand out much apart from being a discount version of both.

I personally think it is pretty nifty myself but I think giving an additional ability unique to it (Maybe something she can develop in the future) would help it stand out more. Just want Hawkeye to get a fair shake and not be laughed off by Hyuga & Uchiha cause I do like it a lot.
 
Shen: King of Digimon

Shen: King of Digimon

Previously Shen: King of the Mist
5DigitNeb said:
Name: Sema Hakiro
Gender: Female
Age: 15
Village: Sunagakure
Jutsu type: Wind Release; Genjutsu; Poison-Specialist; Custom Dojutsu: Hawkeye
Description: Long orange hair; Short; Black Sandals; Purple tee with mesh sleeves; Hazel eyes; Purple shorts
Bio: Sema doesn't use normal ninjutsu, but is instead an archer. She carries around three scrolls which release a crossbow for long range, a normal bow for regular range, and a shortbow for close range. She also uses senbon instead of kunai, or when up against a taijutsu specialist. Sema knows a great deal of poison and taints her arrows and senbon with different poison that inflicts certain effects. She uses her wind style to enhance her speed and to cover her arrows. These enhanced arrows are so sharp due to the wind style that they can pierce through wind storms like dust storms which are usually around Suna.

Sema also has exceptional chakra control which allows her to not use any more chakra then necessary. This caused her to be able to use genjutsu to an amazing degree with vibrations caused by strumming her bows. Her parents are from her father's side, a Hyuga and from her mother's a member of the Yome clan with the Suitekigan. The two caused a new dojutsu which Sema dubbed "Hawkeye" with the ability to have nothing obstruct her vision such as dust and smokescreens. They can zoom in to things in her field of vision and although she can't tell the chakra system of whoever she is looking at like the Byakugan, she can see the inside the skeleton, Nervous system, and Circulatory system if she focuses hard enough. Though then she can only focus on one person and not her surroundings. The Hawkeye ability also causes faster reactions, though not to the extent of the Sharingan where they can predict the opponent's next movements.

She can see farther in a certain direction, though to a lesser degree than the Byakugan. She can also see farther all around her, though once again not to the extent of the Byakugan. This can be improved through training, however. Sema is also very nimble due to her small stature and overall body being smaller than normal.
Likes: Tea, Focusing, Archery
Dislikes: Fighting between her allies, Loudness, Arrogant people.
Missions completed: 30 D-Rank, 17 C-Rank, 3 B-Rank
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Outdid yourself this time nebby, very creative! We don’t even have an archer amongst us yet. Also, don’t think I didn’t catch the liking for tea XD
 
kyuukestu

kyuukestu

Godjacob said:
The ability is interesting, but it may be "too weak" with the Byakugan under Kyuu's command and the Sharingan to stand out much apart from being a discount version of both.

I personally think it is pretty nifty myself but I think giving an additional ability unique to it (Maybe something she can develop in the future) would help it stand out more. Just want Hawkeye to get a fair shake and not be laughed off by Hyuga & Uchiha cause I do like it a lot.
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'with the Byakugan under Kyuu's command'

Squints

you make it sound like I need to buff the eye for it to be comparable to the Sharingan.

I digress though, the fact of the matter is that Hawkeye essentially takes abilities from the Byakugan, and then adds 'not to the extent of the Byakugan' afterward. It does indeed need something if it hopes to stand out in comparison with it.

Unfortunately, this character doesn't match up to Houyi's Archery, so I can't slip Nebby that jutsu. However, Seven Stars Accompanying the Moon is originally an archery move that I redesigned for Sagisō's Shuriken, so there's quite a bit of potential resting on an Archery-styled Shinobi.
 
Shen: King of Digimon

Shen: King of Digimon

Previously Shen: King of the Mist
5DigitNeb said:
Anyways, I was planning on encountering one of the bandits and meet up with team suna by accident. I can say she was with a jonin supervisor but they separated to scout. Sound good?

Edit: By the way I thought of this OC cuz in Shen's post he said arrows :p
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As long as you promise not to drop her like you have with your other OC’s then okay. She’s accepted

Want me to give her some rolls?
 
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