Ask to Join SET SAIL FOR ONE PIECE

[Tailon]

IT'S THE NAME OF THE TREASURE IN THE GRAND LINE-ahem.

While this RP isn't actually about finding that mythical treasure, it is set in the world that the treasure lends its name to, the Four Blues and the Grand Line of One Piece.

This RP will take place after the Marineford War, when Whitebeard's declaration of One Piece's existence has ignited a New Golden Age of Piracy.

Some ground rules:

-Players will take on the roles of a newly formed pirate crew.

-Power level should be around Water 7, meaning choose one between either a high level of skill with a Devil Fruit, proficiency with either Armament or Observation Haki (Conqueror's Haki is stupid rare so it's not allowed), or The Six Powers/Rokushiki for ex-Marines, a Devil Fruit or Haki can also be combined with a special weapon or fighting style.

-No Devil Fruits used by a canon character.

-Don't be an asshole

We're looking for a maximum of 5 people so there are three available slots.

- @Tailon (Me, Captain)
- @Rex (First Mate)
- @Seyriub (Navigator)
- @Pokemon Master Blue (Cook?)
-@Mr.RMA (Shipwright)

I'd prefer a bio right away rather than just a statement of interest, here's the template:

Name:
Gender:
Birthplace:

Age:
Height:
Weight:
Hair:
Eyes:

Clothing:
Identifying Marks:
Build:
Powers and Abilities:
Skills:
Personality:

Occupation:
Past:
Family:
Love Relationships?:

And my bio:

Name: "Chain Gang" Jay
Gender: Male
Birthplace: Fallwind Island, North Blue

Age: 20
Height: 6'3" (190.5 con)
Weight: 180 lbs (81.65 kg)
Hair: Brown
Eyes: Brown

Clothing: Wears a black duster with the sleeves torn off over a sleeveless athletic shirt, black jeans and boots. His only accessories are a bracelet made of spiked chain and a silver stud earrings in both ears.
Identifying Marks: Punk Rock af. Tattoo of his Jolly Rodger, a skull and crossbones chained together, on his shoulder.
Build: Muscular.
Powers and Abilities: Jay ate the Chain-Chain Fruit, a Paramecia Devil Fruit that allows him to generate chains of all shapes and sizes.
Skills: Navigation, sailing, piracy.
Personality: Despite the powers and general appearance, Jay is a fairly easygoing guy, not particularly prone to anger or violence.

Occupation: Pirate Captain
Past: Raised largely at sea by Marine parents, ran off after eating the Chain-Chain Fruit to become a pirate.
Family: Both parents have since died.
Love Relationships?: None.

 

[_Umbreon_]

Id like to join this, but I have literally no idea what any of the above are.

I know barely anything about Once Piece, other than the fact it's a pirate anime?

 

[Steel Seth]

If I can join.

Name: Seth "The Carnivore" Jones
Age: 21
Gender: Male
Birthplace: Alabasta, First half of the Grand Line
Height:5'9"
Weight:141
Hair: Blonde
Eyes: Blue
Clothing: Ripped shorts, Sandals, Shirtless
Identifying Marks: a Mohawk and a dangerously thin body but is healthy.
Build: Skinny but Healthy
Powers and Abilities: Seth ate a Prehistoric Zoan type devil fruit that transforms him into a Carnotaurus his humanoid form is Blue scaled skin, little horns and tail, Sharp teeth, big Theropod feet.
Skills: Cooking, Heavylifting, Archeologist
Occupation: Archeologist Semi Cook.
Personality: He has a slow temper, a laid back guy actually rarely uses his powers, he respect his captain and his crewmates.
Past: Each of his parents were looking for the Prehistoric zoan fruit but failed and both die of lack of rest he made his goal to find the fruit. He found the fruit after 7 years of searching.
Family Missing Sister, both parents are dead.
Love Relationship: None

 

[Rex]

Name: Veks Reinsei
Gender: Male
Birthplace: Loguetown, Polestar Islands, East Blue.

Age: 19
Height: Human & Hybrid forms: 6'1", Beast form: 1'4"
Weight: Human form: 152lbs, Hybrid form: 130lbs, Beast form: 1lb
Hair: Short cut, grayish-brown.
Eyes: Russet.

Clothing: A red sleeveless jacket and three quarter pants, and a red bowler hat with a black band. In his hybrid form his proportion shift causes the pants to reach his ankles, and coat to end before reaching his waist. His coat is always worn open, and hidden inside it are ten flintlock muff pistols, 5 on either side.
Identifying Marks: In his hybrid and beast forms, Veks' hair color becomes his primary fur tone. Cream runs down his front and inside his ears, and his muzzle, lower arms and hands, lower limbs and feet, and the last third of his long tail are darker brown.
Build: Thin and wiry, almost unnaturally so for a human.
Powers and Abilities: Veks is the consumer of the mythical Weasel-Weasel Fruit, Model Kamaitachi. At present, he thinks it is just a Weasel-Weasel Fruit, and hasn't discovered any of his wind based powers. As he begins to unlock his full potential, he can use his cutting winds not only as an offensive skill in of themselves, but to propel his bullets faster, further, and straighter than they might otherwise go due to the small size of his weapons. As he becomes stronger, he'll be able to ride his winds, a skill akin to flying, and eventually create strong enough sustained gusts to fill the sails.
Skills: Weapon maintenance, black powder mixing, marksmanship.
Personality: Veks is slow to warm up to others. He is loyal enough to his comrades, and a firm ally to those he does become friends with. He seeks fortune, and is quite keen on acquiring any shiny object that strikes his fancy.

Occupation: First Mate, Gunner, Sniper.
Past: Veks was something of a problem child, growing up. He was greatly inspired as a child by the story of Gold Roger, who shared Veks' hometown, and died there only months before he was born. The stories of the great treasures on the Grand Line, and the greatest of all, Gol D. Roger's own, eventually inspired him to run away from home, and he has spent several years preforming odd jobs for various crews, looking to find the one with whom he will find these riches with. It was during this for-hire time that Veks discovered his propensity towards gunpowder weapons, from his small muff guns all the way up the largest cannons he can get his hands on, and he is thus a natural gunner and sniper both.
Family: Veks is an only child, and has not had contact with his parents, who still live in Loguetown, since running away
Love Relationships?: None.

 

[Tailon]

@Rex : Approved
@_Umbreon_ : Learn and come back with a character sheet
@Pokemon Master Blue : The rule may have been unclear but you've given yourself double powers, you'll have to choose between Haki or the Devil Fruit. Also Ittoryu is a subset of Zoro's Santoryu, which he invented, it doesn't make sense for your character to know it, especially as Zoro has only been active for a year at the time of this RP. You also describes your character as very thin but his weight implies otherwise.

 

[Steel Seth]

@Rex : Approved
@_Umbreon_ : Learn and come back with a character sheet
@Pokemon Master Blue : The rule may have been unclear but you've given yourself double powers, you'll have to choose between Haki or the Devil Fruit. Also Ittoryu is a subset of Zoro's Santoryu, which he invented, it doesn't make sense for your character to know it, especially as Zoro has only been active for a year at the time of this RP. You also describes your character as very thin but his weight implies otherwise.

I choose Zoan Devil fruit Model: Carnotarus.

 

[Teapot]

I choose Zoan Devil fruit Model: Carnotarus.

I'd recommend you go back to your bio, press the Edit button, and fix the issues @Tailon raised.

 

[Seyriub]

*REVISED*
Name: Bolverk "One-Eye" Vafud
Gender: Male
Birthplace: An ambiguous island in the Grand Line that was located somewhere in the Calm Belt, rumor has it that the island is the home to the elusive faerie race but has yet to be confirmed by any outsiders. The natives call the island the Praetori Isles.

Age: 26
Height: 5'3"
Weight: 178 lbs
Hair: Shoulder-length blonde hair flecked with white tied back into a pony tail with two side bangs framing the sides of his face.
Eyes: Dark stormy blue eyes

Clothing: Bolverk wears a white dress shirt with a brown leather belt on top of some black cardigan pants. Over his shirt, Vafud also tends to wear dark brown leather suspenders whenever he can- claiming that the article of clothing is the very epitome of sophism when asked why. The man also wears an black eye-patch over his right eye and always sports a half bent taper pipe in his ever scowling mouth. On the backside of his belt is worn a pocket pouch, in which he has his journal, a collapsible telescope, and a few boxes of matches contained within. In his right pocket he wears a chained gold gilded compass and dons a long white clothe covered object on his back that he never seems to part with. As for footwear, Bolverk wears a pair of black gold trimmed leather knee high boots.
Identifying Marks: Other than the eye-patch, the ever-present tobacco pipe, and the premature graying hair? His 'wonderful' personality.
Build: On the more muscular side of things.
Powers and Abilities: Having eaten the Ash Ash Fruit, Bolverk has the ability to manipulate, turn into and turn anything (with a few rare exceptions) into ash. The ash that Bolverk manipulates is also combustible, although its fire power is not as powerful when compared to other Devil Fruits such as the Mera Mera Fruit or the Magu Magu Fruit. Bolverk also has a great aptitude in spearmanship but only uses this particular skill when he thinks his opponent is strong enough to warrant to do so. Otherwise, the one-eyed pirate tends to just use his fists and devil fruit ability when fighting at leisure.
Skills: Navigational skills, spearmanship, hand to hand combat, the capability to talk with a pipe in his mouth, and the ability to drink 5 barrels of mead without pause.
Personality: Stubborn, foul mouthed, unrestrained, and an irredeemable drunkard, Bolverk is the epitome of that loud annoying old man you would see every Wednesday in your local bar- except for the fact that the Vafud isn't exactly 'old' and ironically hates loud things when sober. Seemingly oblivious to the notion that is called etiquette, this man will make sure to eat and drink as loud and grotesquely as he can with his bare hands and make any man watching to lose his appetite. The pirate also has a tendency to bitterly complain about his woes and misgivings and will go on muttering about them throughout the day. The habit tends to get even worse when he's drunk, in which he'll just outright start yelling instead of muttering.

Freedom is something Vafud cherishes immensely and therefore hates being restricted/ordered by anyone and anything; except for his captain of course, whom's words he follows begrudgingly. Yet, despite his lack of respect, One-Eye is still a man who dearly treasures his shipmates and his captain like his own family. Although he vehemently denies this fact every chance he can get. At times Bolverk can also be quite the gullible man when his guard is down, making him quite the easy target for a good fooling during peaceful moments.

Lastly, to Bolverk, there are four absolutes in his life that he holds with an iron will.

His love for 'family.'
His dedication to spearmanship.
Mead.
His pure loathing hatred for the Celestial Dragons.

Occupation: Navigator and the ship's biggest money drain.
Past: Bolverk generally keeps to talking about his past to a minimum. However, there were times when his usually tight lips loosened when he became utterly drunk on mead. The pirate spoke of how he had a kind wise mother, a strong but idiotic father, a cute and utterly devious little sister who always got what she wanted, a crybaby younger brother whom he'd always tease, and a brave older brother who seemed to be a genius at anything he tried but never forgot to dote on his younger siblings. Despite speaking about his family and their antics during his rants, he never elaborates on what had happened to them, despite being asked several times on occasion, and always breaks down into a sobbing fit in the end.
Family: Father: Deceased, Mother: Deceased, Little Sister: Deceased, Older Brother: Unknown, and Younger Brother: Deceased
Love Relationships?: Nope.

 

[Tailon]

@Seyriub : Accepted, however please elaborate a bit on the Space-Space Fruit. How does one become "space" as a Logia, etc. Also, in character not wanting to mention it is not the same as an out of character description, if you want to keep those things secret for reasons that's fine though.

@Pokemon Master Blue : Accepted with the revisions.

 

[Seyriub]

Ah, I forgot to add this in with my bio, but Bolverk keeps the fact that he's eaten a devil-fruit a secret from his crew due to not wanting to divulge his past and because he wont be using the abilities anyways. Geez, feel like I'm making my RP keep too many secrets at this point...

Edit: Though the term here would be more along the lines of 'if no one asks about it, no need to say anything about it' rather than it being a secret.

 

[Seyriub]

@Tailon Of course. So regarding the Logia bit of the fruit's abilities, rather then becoming space itself its more along the lines of negating one's space. The space space fruit's abilities generally amount to one thing, the complete control of the laws of space and that means you can break, warp, negate, and distort anything, from space itself to random household items, within the dimension around or created by you. Now this law rewriting nature of the devil-fruit's powers also include the human body within the scope of the things it can affect and that practically means you can negate your body's 'connection' to the space around you in all but your visual form (people can still see you but pretty much everything passes right through you); but because of how more active this 'passive' ability is, the space space devil-fruit can also be considered a paramecia type as well- it's up for discussion really.

Now you must be thinking that this is stupidly OP...Yeah it kinda is, I can't really deny it, so that's why I'll be adding devil-fruit awakening into play in order to limit Bolverk more. So, instead of the normal one-time awakening that devil fruit users have, the Space Space devil fruit user, specifically Bolverk, needs to go through two awakenings in order to gain all the possible abilities due to his trauma. Here's a list of abilities that go under each level of awakening.

Pre-Awakening (trauma - these abilities are used subconciously by Bolverk and never actively sought out for use)
- (Passive) Spatial awareness: Lesser [knows where things are within a radius of 8 meters from person - effect gets progressively weaker from the 8 meter point line]
- (Passive) Self-space negation: Lesser [can be affected by Haki]
- (Active) Muscle movement guide: Lesser [guides muscles through spatial awareness to make perfect movements - imperfect]

Awakened (Trauma released- how things should of been) Anchor Definition: The origin point in which the user wishes a certain ability to stem from. It cannot be moved unless the user erases it and creates a new one in a new location.
- (Passive) Spatial calculation: Lesser [The ability to subconsciously calculate all numbers within a certain radius (30 Meters) of space around the user - this ability is mandatory in order to use any of the Active abilities that involve the manipulation of space]
- (Active) Distortion of space: Lesser [The ability to twist the laws of physics so that it no longer applies within a certain area. Anything or anyone trapped within will be locked away with their five senses taken from them. Who, what, how large the space, and the duration of this ability is limited and dependent on the price willing to be paid. This ability can also be used to create something similar to that of a black hole by deliberately disturbing certain laws of physics instead of all of them at once. However, the instability of such an ability is so that it isn't recommended in the case of friendly fire]
- (Active) Creation of space: Lesser [A different dimension, a black emptiness, can be created in which anyone the user desires so can inhabit. Duration and size of dimension is limited and is dependent on how much of a price the user wishes to pay]
- (Active) Negation of space: Lesser [Can negate the ability or properties of an object or a part of a human being within a certain amount of space from the 'anchor' to this ability]
- (Active) Warping of space: Lesser [The instantaneous erasing and rewriting of the user's body, or anyone
else at a higher price, to warp from one place to the next. distance is limited and although the price isn't high, if done incorrectly, the user can possibly erase himself from existence. The teleportation process is instantaneous - limit is 10 meters]

Awakened (Real)
- (Passive) Greater enlightenment of the dimensions [All previous abilities, passive or active, are raised to the status of Greater and will have their strength/duration and cost respectively higher and lowered. Some abilities will gain greater boosts than others. E.g. Spatial Awareness limit of 8 meters would increase to a whopping 6 kilometers while Warping of space would go from 10 meters to 50 meters.
- (Active) Traversing the Borders [By cracking the walls between dimensions the user can create a gate between places through imaging the destination, albeit the image must be of high detail. The higher the detail the higher the accuracy of the travel towards the destination with the opposite holding true. The 'teleportation' is also not instantaneous as the user, or anyone wanting to go through, will need to walk through the gate first and walk a few steps into the darkness before breaking out through the other side.]
- (Active) The Realization of Space [Through enlightenment, the user can 'actualize' the properties of negating space in the form of a black mist/cloud. This black element can be used to form objects and wardrobe - can be also infused into user's body upon gaining a higher mastery with this ability. The black element takes on the property of being able to 'eat' anything except for the user to a certain limit and is also used in Bolverk's final transformation.]
- (Active) Supernova [Disrupt the laws of space greatly to the point where the destabilized area collapses on itself and implodes- the blast radius covering around 4 kilometers with the the air blast radius unaccounted.]
- (Active) Manipulator of Space [Gained the ability to control all the qualities of space as far as the eye can see. Can be used to restrain/disable opponents, effects are noticeably weaker on stronger adversaries]

{Awakening(Real) of a Devil Fruit is said to be an incredibly rare process, so Bolverk will not be awakening his anytime soon. Not until a long long time at the very least- not to mention that his trauma is only making it harder for him to reach his limits.}


Also, just a side note, its a whole lot easier to affect the user's own body than it is with the non-users or else Bolverk can just outright 'delete' anyone he dislikes whenever he pleases and that would just be boring (and rule-breaking). For anyone other than Bolverk to be affected by his powers the person being attempted to affect would either have to be...

A.) willing to be affected
B.) weaker to Bolverk in strength
C.) Bolverk must have enough innate strength in order to resist the backlash of the ability he is trying to use [this condition is absolutely mandatory] E.g. If Bolverk tries to 'delete' someone from existence, assuming that good ole One eye is even able to make it this far into his ability training, he himself must also be able to endure/resist the process of being 'deleted' and survive. Although surviving doesn't always mean that you'll stay intact.

I hope you didn't mind this wall of text (Sorry ) and it answered any of the questions you may of had. If you have any more then feel free to ask.

PS: I'm trying to balance this Devil Fruit power without taking too much away, so if anyone's got any ideas please, please share them with me. ;-;

 

[Tailon]

These abilities sound fine, however, because the user does not become their element, it sounds more like a high level Paramecia (such as the Tremor-Tremor Fruit) rather than a Logia.

The ability to manipulate things within a certain radius as well as causing physical station is somewhat similar to Trafalgar Law's Op-Op Fruit, only more generalized? Perhaps if his powers were primarily passive, like Luffy, with active attacks only working in a straight line or being the result of manipulating his own body?

 

[Seyriub]

Yeah, I guess I'll have to change it from logia to paramecia. Doesn't make sense for me to keep it that after reading what you said. As for what you said about making his powers primarily passive(manipulation of one's body), it gave me a good idea but still gonna have to think on it though. Thanks

 

[Rex]

Alright, let's see. I'll go down the line of powers you've mentioned and give my opinions and such. The ship Tailon and I are looking at at the moment is a Sloop-of-War, and I will be using the measurements of the USS Portsmouth as a typical example of this type of ship.

Arcus Diabolus: Bolverk, starting from the top:

- (Passive) Spatial awareness: Lesser [knows where things are within a radius of 8 meters from person - effect gets progressively weaker from the 8 meter point line]

Without any sort of limitation, this ability makes your character practically invulnerable in combat. 8 meters radius projects a sphere 52 feet in diameter around your character. Portsmouth was 151 feet long, which gives your character complete knowledge of a third of whichever deck he happens to be standing on, plus 26 feet straight up and down. With Greater Awakening, that increases to complete knowledge of everything within a 3.24 nautical mile radius. Couple in the fact that at best most cannons lost the ability to penetrate the hull of a ship-of-the-line at distances greater than half a mile, this would include complete knowledge of everything going on on the enemy ship, and any other ships nearby, for that matter.

- (Passive) Self-space negation: Lesser [can be affected by Haki]

Guessing this is what you're talking about in the first paragraph. Two things, first of which is really our fault for not mentioning. Our main villain is a Marine Commodore, with the Gone-Gone Devil Fruit. This essentially makes him an opposite of our "chains-of-commanding" captain. This comes with impermeability and the inability to be bound by essentially removing himself temporarily from this plane of existence. Second, with intangibility comes invisibility. Without a physical form to reflect light off of, you would not be able to be seen.

- (Active) Muscle movement guide: Lesser [guides muscles through spatial awareness to make perfect movements - imperfect]

This is partially why Spatial Awareness is a problem. What's stopping your character from blocking or dodging everything when their body passively already goes through the motions?

Anchor Definition: The origin point in which the user wishes a certain ability to stem from. It cannot be moved unless the user erases it and creates a new one in a new location.

I like this idea as a limit to his powers. There could be more to it, like creating and holding the point takes time and energy in of itself.

- (Active) Distortion of space: Lesser [The ability to twist the laws of physics so that it no longer applies within a certain area. Anything or anyone trapped within will be locked away with their five senses taken from them. Who, what, how large the space, and the duration of this ability is limited and dependent on the price willing to be paid. This ability can also be used to create something similar to that of a black hole by deliberately disturbing certain laws of physics instead of all of them at once. However, the instability of such an ability is so that it isn't recommended in the case of friendly fire]

As we get into awoken powers, we begin stepping on the toes of Marshall D. Teach and his Dark-Dark Fruit. Most specifically, Blackbeard exhibits a complete control of Gravity (Which is related to its name through the fact that like a Black Hole, Teach's gravity powers are so powerful not even light escapes their grasp).

- (Active) Creation of space: Lesser [A different dimension, a black emptiness, can be created in which anyone the user desires so can inhabit. Duration and size of dimension is limited and is dependent on how much of a price the user wishes to pay]

This again goes back to our own Commodore's planes of reality powers. Even with only the "basic" powers that your character would have had without your undisclosed reasons he already matches our big bad in power.

- (Active) Negation of space: Lesser [Can negate the ability or properties of an object or a part of a human being within a certain amount of space from the 'anchor' to this ability]

This is another big stopping point for me. Does 'ability' extend to devil fruit powers? How about combat abilities, swordsmanship and marksmanship? How about more basic things? The ability to breathe, or make rational decisions? As it stands, this power gives your character the ability to shut down any and all enemies within a space you haven't actually defined.

- (Active) Warping of space: Lesser [The instantaneous erasing and rewriting of the user's body, or anyone
else at a higher price, to warp from one place to the next. distance is limited and although the price isn't high, if done incorrectly, the user can possibly erase himself from existence. The teleportation process is instantaneous - limit is 10 meters]

Again, going back to the Portsmouth, this gives you a sphere with a radius of 32 feet, diameter 64 feet, or nearly half an entire deck of the ship. Add in the 50 meter 'greater' radius, that's a 164 foot radius. You could stand at one end of the ship and easily effect space on the other end with feet to spare. Combined with spatial awareness, what's stopping you from erasing cannonballs from existence at that point, to say nothing of your ability to delete characters at will. When you're already on the level of the big bad, that doesn't leave much room for people to be stronger.

- (Active) Traversing the Borders [By cracking the walls between dimensions the user can create a gate between places through imaging the destination, albeit the image must be of high detail. The higher the detail the higher the accuracy of the travel towards the destination with the opposite holding true. The 'teleportation' is also not instantaneous as the user, or anyone wanting to go through, will need to walk through the gate first and walk a few steps into the darkness before breaking out through the other side.]

This, again, goes back to the Commodore's Gone-Gone Fruit, as using the other planes as a method of quick transportation is something we've considered.

- (Active) The Realization of Space [Through enlightenment, the user can 'actualize' the properties of negating space in the form of a black mist/cloud. This black element can be used to form objects and wardrobe - can be also infused into user's body upon gaining a higher mastery with this ability. The black element takes on the property of being able to 'eat' anything except for the user to a certain limit and is also used in Bolverk's final transformation.]

This is exactly the form Blackbeard's Dark-Dark Fruit powers take, including the ability to take in and destroy everything that crosses it. And let's not forget that Blackbeard is one of the Yonko, one of the four strongest pirates that rule the New World.

- (Active) Supernova [Disrupt the laws of space greatly to the point where the destabilized area collapses on itself and implodes- the blast radius covering around 4 kilometers with the the air blast radius unaccounted.]

And by now there is little point for our characters to exist. Yours can effectively nuke anyone, though granted it'd likely kill him, too. The area of a circle with a radius of 4km is 50.27km^2. That's just the blast itself, not even getting into the shockwave. As for that, let's look at Nuclear Warheads. Specifically, let's look at Little Boy, the bomb dropped on Hiroshima. Little Boy's fireball was about 1200 feet in diameter, that's the 'blast.' Following the 5 psi lethal area rule, the shockwave killed everyone within a diameter of 3.5 kilometers from the center of the explosion. That's not even the size of the radius of your blast itself.

- (Active) Manipulator of Space [Gained the ability to control all the qualities of space as far as the eye can see. Can be used to restrain/disable opponents, effects are noticeably weaker on stronger adversaries]

After everything else, ending on this ability is almost anti-climactic. My only worry is that it would lead to arguments down the line ("My character disables your character!" "Yeah well my character is strong enough to resist that!")

 

[Seyriub]

Shit, alright, looking through your criticisms I'm just going to have to scrap the Space-space fruit idea (either that or keep the idea and just bring the powers down to specific abilities) and bring in something less... diverse and stupidly strong. Thank you for pointing out the flaws, In anycase I think I'll revise everything regarding the abilities of the Space Space Fruit and post the results for you to see. I'm probably going to rename the fruit as well.

 

[Rex]

I think the idea could work, perhaps if you focused more on bending and folding space, rather than creating and destroying it? For example, for teleportation, you could briefly pinch two spaces together and step between them, rather than creating a different realm. You could bend space to change the trajectory of certain attacks, within reason. Gut the muscle guide and reduce the awareness down to two or three meters radius, but make it require focus so he can still be overwhelmed or taken by surprise. And as your character regains and eventually surpasses their baseline powers, you could increase the distance and duration of space you're pinching together, bend space to the point of completely reflecting attacks, and increase awareness within reason.

An awareness of 10-20 at baseline and 50-100 at maximum power seems reasonable, so long as, again, he can be caught off guard or overwhelmed by numbers, just because you're 'aware' of everything happening doesn't mean 'seeing' it all, if you spread your focus too much you begin missing things, and perhaps as you gain strength you'll be able to 'see' more as you spread your focus further out.

In all, the fruit might be a lot more defensive than you were going for, but I don't think these ideas step on anyone's toes? It's up to you and Tailon, in the end. Sorry if my original reply seemed flippant!

 

[Seyriub]

No no you didn't sound flippant at all, no need to worry about it. It's my fault for getting lazy and not specifying any of the rules regarding the use of the powers anyways. But at this point I feel like I messed up with my character and just went somewhere I didn't really want it to go. Damn you my Mary-sue tendencies! *Shakes fist*

Well, as much as I liked the idea of a Space Space Fruit, I'm probably going to just scrap this Devil Fruit and try going with a new one instead... And while I'm on the topic how does the idea of an Ash Ash fruit sound? (I'm so sorry for being such a fickle person, please forgive me. ;-; )

Abilities would go somewhat like this:

The Devil Fruit user of the Ash Ash Fruit has the ability to turn into and manipulate ash; the user also has the ability to turn anything into ash. There are a some rules as to how the ash conversion ability works though, for example the user will not be able to convert water (and fire), especially large sources of it. However, it is possible to choke out water by filling it out with ash, although this process will take time depending on how large the source is (e.g. small bottle of water will only take a moment's notice to fill, while something like lakes would take hours to do so [Oceans and seas are practically impossible]). Things like vegetation are far more easier to turn into ash however and will only take a moment to do so. Metals are also convertable but they too will require some time in order for the conversion to take place, although the metal will weaken in the process so perhaps complete conversion will not be required.

People and complex living beings however, requires the Ash Ash Fruit user to grab hold of the person/animal and hold on for atleast an average of 22 seconds (more and less time required depending on the size of the opposition) in order to convert them into ash. But if the user happens to let go of the target, then the body parts of that have been converted will be instantly reverted to normal. Armament Haki can be used to severely cripple the ash conversion ability to a snail's pace, however the armament Haki's defensive abilities will take also a hit to a small degree (what would normally take 22 seconds for the ash conversion to complete would now take around at least three minutes of continuous contact to work. As for the armament Haki, only a small part of its defensive abilities would take a hit. For example: A regular sword strike would still be able to pierce a limb cloaked in armament Haki, but a sword strike empowered by a Haki of a similar nature and strength would be able to cut into the limb instead of canceling out)

(Note: Conversion ability requires the target to be in contact with the Ash Ash Fruit user. Although ash can be used to convert other objects into ash, this particular method will not work on liquids and complex living beings.)
As a Devil Fruit under the fire element, the Ash Ash Fruit is capable of combusting ash into flames, however its fire-power will be weaker then that of the Mera Mera Fruit and the Magu Magu Fruit.

Weaknesses: Seastone, water element, powerful winds, and the fire-power of the Ash Ash Fruit is negated by stronger Devil Fruits of a similar burning nature.

I'll probably make the 'ash conversion ability with the ash itself' method an ability that can only be used upon 'awakening' and make the Devil Fruit more close/mid range (similar to Smoker's Smoke Smoke Fruit).

Again, I'm so sorry for causing more work for you guys...

 

[Tailon]

This Ash-Ash Fruit would be a Logia, then? Either way, the abilities sound fine, and in fact I would also be willing to accept a revised Space-Space Fruit with limitations like the ones Rex outlined.

 

[Seyriub]

Alright, time work out my revision for the bio and to answer your question, yes the Ash Ash Fruit is a Logia type.

 

[StellarWind Elsydeon]

Blacky19 has been kicked out of 'charms for multiple counts of sockpuppetry. Delorted.

 

[Mr.RMA]

Name: Sage Garrick
Gender: Male
Birthplace: Las Camp, West Blue

Age: 17
Height: 5’11”
Weight: 190 lbs
Hair: Auburn
Eyes: Hazel

Clothing: Wears his commander coat from his time in the marines, with a white undershirt beneath, green cargo slacks and black boots. He wears the ascot from his uniform around his head as a makeshift bandana of sorts.
Identifying Marks: A marine tattoo with a large X shaped scar over his right hand, and a somewhat scraggly beard that manages to mature him fairly well when it's grown in, but without it, he looks downright babyish.
Build: Stocky
Powers and Abilities: Proficient in the Shigan, Soru and Kami'e techniques of Rokushiki. He specializes in an evasive form of combat, dodging and striking quickly and efficiently, going by the philosophy that so long as they can't hit him, but he can hit them, he can't lose.
Skills: Shipbuilding and maintenance, elusive hand-to-hand combat, medicine, swimming
Personality: A rather orderly sort, though he no longer abides by the law of the Marines, he still tends to like having things planned out and organized, nothing senselessly cruel or over the top, especially towards those who are genuinely innocent people. Though he can easily get stressed over those who choose a more anarchistic approach to things, he tends to keep the frustration buried within himself, maintaining a somewhat cool composure, though this leaves him prone to major outbursts if his tolerance levels reach their breaking point.

Occupation: Shipwright, and the closest thing to a medic they have
Past: Having been a part of the Marines since he was old enough to enlist, Garrick’s talents and desire to improve himself boosted him fairly quickly up the ranks of the military. However, his skills weren’t as appreciated among his peers as they were his superiors, and though it seemed to be simple envy and jealously at first, as he moved up the commissioned ranks, he started hearing talk of ways he could be ‘dealt with’, and he quickly came to the realization that if he stuck around, someone was going to create just the ‘accident’ to stop him from rising any further. Having been shipped out to Marineford in the midst of the war, he was jumped by several of his crewmates, forcing him to fight them off and jump ship, fortunately finding another vessel to stow away on. Resenting what the Marines proved to be, beyond the idealistic views he once had of them, he chose to leave the major world power behind, turning to a life of piracy in order to sustain himself.
Family: As far as he knows, his father and mother are still in Las Camp, and his younger sister is herself a Warrant Officer in the Marines.
Love Relationships?: None

 

[Tailon]

@Mr.RMA : You in Breh

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First post will go up soon, you'll be tagged.

 

[Seyriub]

 

[SuperRubyX]

Name: Tsubasa Taiga
Gender: Male
Birthplace: East Blue

Age: 20
Height: 6'9"
Weight: 133 lbs
Hair: Dark Brown
Eyes: Brown

Clothing: Black T-shirt, sleeveless blue jacket, ripped grey jeans, sandals, and black gloves
Identifying Marks: He uses an eyepatch
Build: Average
Powers and Abilities: Tsubasa ate the Zoan type: Snake Snake fruit, which allows the user to transform himself into a snake. When he is angry, he can enter Orochimaru Mode: This allows him to turn himself in the legendary eight headed and eight tails snake: Yamata no Orochi!
Skills: He is a very talented tamer! He can tame ANY kind of beast!
Personality: Calm, he is a very relaxed person

Occupation: Tamer
Past: His parents were killed by a pirate known as Cyclop. When he turned 13, he challenged Cyclop to a duel. He lost, and when he was going to die by the hands of Cyclop, a mysteryous pirate saved him. He trained hard, day and night. Now he is a very talented tamer, and a good-heart person. His bounty is: 60.000.000B!
Family:
Father: Ken Taiga Senior
Mother: Unknown
Brother: Ken Taiga Jr. (25 - Alive)
Love Relationships?: Sakura Nanami, a Marine Captain

 

[Tailon]

@Hebi-chan The RP is full, sorry.

 

[SuperRubyX]

Ok, no problem

 

[Steel Seth]

So, we all set for ADVENTURE!

 

[Seyriub]

SO sorry! Went missing for awhile there. I'll be posting as soon as I can!