I feel needy, but I am like, the most annoying person you'll meet in real life.
Fastt, if you wanna know what stuish qualities Hysan has, here they are!
-OP. I've never seen him lose, or been in a tough situation, or even come close to losing. He seems to win every fight he's in. Remember, he's only 13. Remember what you were like at 13. I cried when I dropped my cupcake and I wore too much eyeliner, so that's what I look back on when trying to write my characters. For example, Raina lost the fight with Luke, and came close to losing several other times before pulling through. And she has a Cherubi obsession to prove she has a soft side, and isnt just a blunt dick.
-No character development.
To make a character better, sprinkle in a little development to make them seem less one-dimensional. Im in the middle of Raina's arc (I'm really excited to write it btw), and Luke had his Lucario and Angel had her eyes. All Hysan does is win, and doesn't do a lot.
He has no personality, his personality is defined by things like heroic deeds. Not everyone likes being the damsel in distress, Raina sure as hell doesnt, which is why I had her get angry.
You also don't seem to write him traveling, which is part of the fun. Put him through mud and other terrain, quicksand or something more than flying on his Braviary.
-Skills.
His skills are thrown in. Apparently he's a good trainer, but how? He started at the same time Raina did, yet you don't give him reason. Was he a strong battler before? If so, it's never specisfied. Raina's an underdog and sucks, because she started like a week ago. Who beats gym leader's in a week? The strongest trainers in the world are defeated easily?
-You don't seem to know where this character is going.
This isn't really a stuish quality, but you seem to be making stuff up as you go. This is more of personal taste, and a lot of writers and RPers do. I like to plan out my character- develop her, give her fears (she has a fear of heights and gets motion sick on long rides), dislikes to give her disagreements with other trainers, have her appearance reflect on her personality (green is the color of uncertainty), and other crap like that.
So yeah. That's what I could come up with.
You don't have to fix these if you don't have to. This took forever, and yell I'll make a post.